Saturday, March 17, 2012

Five Sentence Fiction

Lillie McFerrin has this wonderful word prompt challenge called Five Sentence Fiction. This week's word is coincidence, which was chosen by yours truly.  For more information on the challenge, click here.

There wasn't much she could say; she'd followed him all the way from 3rd Avenue and River. Twice she stopped to force down the sour bile the rose in her throat; it should have been enough for her to abandon her plan, but it wasn't. She wanted to know, even though knowing would ruin her. When he spotted her across the room, the corners of his mouth pulled down tight; a gesture she both loved and feared. Would he believe her if she claimed it was a coincidence?

9 comments:

Jo-Anne (jtvancouver) said...

Angie, this reminded me of something told to me years ago: never ask a question that you don't want the answer to. (ends with an infinitive but you know what I mean!). I really like this story! I want to know what happened before AND what happens next!

Angie Richmond said...

Thanks Jo-Anne!

claire said...

Great take on the prompt! I really enjoyed your descriptions, and now I want to know what happens next!

Kern Windwraith said...

What I love about your story is that, although we'd like to know what's led to this point and what will follow, you've given us enough to make this stand alone. We're left with our curiosity and speculations, and the unpleasant feeling that this can't end well...

Really nice job!

Angie Richmond said...

Thanks Claire and Kern! Always nice to receive positive feedback :)

Sandra Crook said...

Very evocative piece, a woman slightly ashamed, slightly apprehensive about her behaviour. Nice work.

Angie Richmond said...

Thank you Sandra!

Lillie McFerrin said...

I like the mystery behind these sentences. This is a story I'd like to know more about :)

Angie Richmond said...

Thanks Lillie!

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