Friday, January 20, 2012

Five Sentence Fiction

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Lillie McFerrin's Five Sentence Fiction. This week's inspiration word is: Radiance

The sign on the side of the road announced - with half-hearted, paint-peeling enthusiasm - that the town was named Radiance. Finlay drove through slowly, hoping to catch a glimpse of its glowing beauty. Its buildings were drab grey and yellowing white, its grass browning and turning to dust right before his eyes. The people wore expressionless faces, and various shades of dull-coloured clothing, oblivious to the irony that surrounded them. If this was their idea of Radiance, Finlay wondered what lackluster looked like to them.

12 comments:

Donna B. McNicol said...

I like it...could turn that into a great story!

Angie Richmond said...

Thanks Donna!

Jo-Anne (jtvancouver) said...

'paint-peeling enthusiasm'...love that! I agree with Donna, it would be great to find out more about the denizens of dull Radiance. Really liked this. :))

Angie Richmond said...

Oh dear, I can't start another WIP...I have 3 on the go right now...but then again...

Thanks for the comment Jo-Anne!

Lisa Shambrook said...

Love the premise of this one!

Cara Michaels said...

Nice, Angie. Love the dichotomy. :)

SJIHolliday said...

What a great name for a town!

McKenzie said...

Ahh, Finlay is such a cool name. That was awesome. :)

Angie Richmond said...

Thanks for all the wonderful comments!

Lillie McFerrin said...

So cool! This is a town I would like to know more about :)

Sif said...

This made me smile because 'dull-coloured clothing' seems to emphasise how even driving through the town saps the narrator of inspiration and their own radiance. Clever!

Meghan said...

That's so great Angie! Very, very, creative. I could picture the town of "Radiance" as if I were the one driving through. Great job.

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